Sporian Willis

[sporian]

Character

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Name: Sporian

Age: 10

Gender: Male

Pokemorph: none

Appearance: Sporian has blue eyes, with Blonde hair. His usual wear is an All- American Reject T- shirt with ripped blue jeans. He usually has spiky hair, but he'll smooth it for events. His face is smooth with fairly good features, save for the scar on his left cheek. But he can usually hide it with a turtleneck or something.

Personality: Sporian is the reckless type, with a "Gotta enjoy the little things" attitude. He has a fear of meteors. Giant, flaming, rocks of doom. What's not to fear? He likes red and The All- American Rejects (See appearance). He also likes Psychic pokemon.


History: Sporian had an.... interesting history. His parents were rich. His dad was a CEO of a company,his mom the VP. He was a spoiled brat. But then, a meteorite killed them. Therefor, his fear. Then, he was ten. They weren't there for his birthday, but he's still able to get a pokemon.
But what happened in between that? Well, he was transfered t a foster family. He was happy there..... until they got divorced. He got a step- dad. He hated his step- dad. He couldn't wait till his tenth birthday.
Career: Trainer- just starting.

The Daemon

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Name: Trey

Form (If settled):

Favorite Form/s (If not settled): Mankey

Appearance: Trey has blue eyes, whatever form she is in. In mankey form, she has smooth fur. She usually have gloves for her hands. She has rocky features on his face, and her tail is slightly bent from an accident (I'll elaborate on that part in the

Personality: Trey is pretty much the ultimate friend. She enjoys sometimes stopping and smelling the flowers, but healways gets sucked in by Sporian. He hates popcorn, and books! She likes all of Sporians quirky ways to get things done, and shares his love of Psychic pokemon with him.

Sorry man. You didn't elaborate on your minimum paragraph sentance length. And Ididn't read the book. I suck. And I meant meteorite. They're the ones that get down to us.

[Birdybot]

Sorry, but there are several reasons why I can't accept this.

You said his daemon is the opposite of him. Daemons are supposed to be you soul, so they'd be more similarities than differences.

All the sections are far too short. You've only done three or four sentances for his Appearance and Personality! Surely you can add things in more description, like for Appearance how his face is shaped, how his body is shaped, and so on. His Personality could say things like is he quiet, what does he enjoy and hate, and so on. Take a look at other profiles if you're stuck.

Lastly, no-one gets killed by meteors. They usually burn up in the atmosphere. It just seems odd to me that both his parents were killed by a meteor.

[sporian]

dited. And meteorites is what I meant. Those are the ones that touch the ground. And if they were inspecting the offices, and the meteor was about the size of a grapefruit, and it was just the right speed....

[Birdybot]

I know, that's what I was meaning, too. But hey, I don't think anyone since the dinosaurs have been killed by one. Oh well, whatever.

I can still only give this a Very Common. Please go into more depth. When I said a good paragraph, I meant six or seven lines. That'll get you an Uncommon, and if you squeeze in another paragraph after that, I can make it Very Uncommon, but you'd have to add a paragraph to the History if you want that.