Natarn Fulhem

[nfullam]

Character

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Name: Natarn Fulhen

Age: 11

Gender: Male

Pokemorph: none

Appearance: Natarn has Dirty Blond hair that looks like it hasn't been combed in days. He has a scar on his cheek that he says he got from a injured Charmander that he tried to help. He has silver glasses the shine in the light. He normally wears a maroon short sleeve shirt with black jeans. He likes to wear a hoodie that has a silver dragon on it.

Personality: Natarn is usually nice, but he gets upset if you mess with his friends or family. He is a bit cranky at times. He can get a bad attitude if you get him annoyed. He does act a bit punkish and swift.

History: Natarn's Dad was a breeder. Natarn has been raised by his mom because his dad went missing on a trip to Charizific Valley to help a charizard that broke its wing in a landslide. Natarn loved Pokemon since he saw his dad working with a Pichu that had a few notches in it's ear. There after he tried to help his dad with pokemon that were hurt or abandoned. Since his dad went missing he and his mom have been running the shelter his dad used to run. His first pokemon that he helped was a Comby that was injured because its trainer abused it. His most recent Patient was a Apom that sprained its tail.

Career:Breeder

The Daemon

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Name:Erynia

Form (If settled):not settled

Favorite Form/s (If not settled):A Chattot with Orange and purple feathers, A Comby that is Maroon, and a Linoone that is white with a gold stripe.

Appearance:one of the Forms above

Personality:Punkish, tomboyish, Rude, Obnoxious

[Birdybot]

OK, I can only give you a Very Common rating for this.

For one, spelling. Combee has no 'y', Chatot had one 't', Aipom has an 'i', blonde is spelt with an 'e' on the end... use the Proboards spellchecker, yeah?

You have randomly capitalyzed words, too. You've capitalyzed rude, obnoxious, orange, maroon, dirty, blonde, and possible more.

It's not too detailed either, is it? Surely more things happened in his life than his dad went missing and he helped run a shelter? I'd love it if you could make Natarn's appearance and personality two paragraphs long, and his history three paragraphs. And proper paragraphs, at least five lines.

Thanks! ^-^